Please do! 😀 This is good.
I need to know this too.
For us novelists, writers, and authors.
Once again I screwed up the courage to do something new. The last time I was turned down, it took me a year to try again.
Married by Mistake was deemed to be intriguing but unworthy, but worry not, I am not tossing this into the trash, it will be polished (again) and a home found for it.
*Sigh*. Chaotic is how I write I guess. I developed it to a failure on “Flee” (currently being rewritten as well to shine the way it should), and the style may have spilled over into the romance story.
I don’t know. But it is back to the manuscript and trying to polish a..ermm… dirt clod. Something I thought was polished enough, had enough humor in it, a touch of sex, some chocolate (Same scene), fun and adventure, heartbreak, drugs, Mom’n’Dad and an idiot boyfriend. (I’m a dad of 2 princesses, all boyfriends are idiots until proven otherwise).
Perhaps I may need a critique team? Someone, when I have been up late at night too many times I have gone blind to using ten-dollar words and going off into the land of confusion, will send back “Huh?”
Seriously, I do know I get a bit blind after the second or third edit, perhaps I am not that great of a storyteller- except I have so many stories to tell and they demand to be written.
If I don’t?
I pace, get grumpy, I live in the world anyway. I shoot my bow and have conversations with the characters that want their story told. Sometimes they stand in line.
Sometimes they argue. Ever see a pre-teen child pirate from the 17th century argue with a 21st century college student and have the 24th century captain-paramedic want to talk about his patient that fell off a roof? I have.
Even now, they are waiting – impatiently – while I look Married by Mistake over and over, while re-writing Shock and Awe. (And writing this in the meantime.)
At any rate, test audience, anyone interested? Get the chance of an assembled and proposed for submission. I know often the stories I post here are so raw as to reek, then, of course, they tend to go away after a bit as the chapters are re-written and assembled (Some deleted) and the pattern as a whole changes, including sometimes the names of the protagonists or antagonists. *shrug* Such is the world of editing. Right?
Ah well, back to re-writing, reading and editing, trying to figure out how to make a romance of a college student that is facing how to explain to her parents 1. That she got drunk, then married during the party that she does not remember. 2. How to deal with the situation of a fiance back home (Actually goes to Mt. M University) 3. Should she introduce the husband-by-accident to her parents. I have alluded to, but i don’t think, he is older than the parents. 4. Should it have more sex-and-chocolate scenes?
Anyone interested in having a chance to read before-the-submission manuscripts?
The more the merrier.
Back to editing Married by Mistake, needs the hooks polished…or written in.
Chapter 3. Salvation Army
He walked down the road, it was cooler than the day before, he was able to charge his power reserves to capacity the day before.
The humans might call it “Full”, he had the opportunity to experience more of the generous spirit of the American south.
During the storm the day before, power went out, leaving the café in the dark. The owner fretted about the melting sweets in the freezer and prohibited anyone from opening the doors without reason, finally succumbing to the alternatives to throw out meats as the walk-in began to push the legal limit of the health codes.
The owner, Pete Durham, chose the option to cook the meats, slow smoking some with a wood-fired smoker overnight. Late into the night Pete and James cooked. Ice cream threatened to melt and spoil.
The Android could convert the butterfat and sugar confection to electrical power easily, and ate far more than his
They fed truckers, news crews, passers-by and Steve for what was customers only felt they could donate. Even giving Steve a wrapped five-pound wood-fire cooked roast when he left.
“We can’t refridgerate it. It will be ready for your eating anytime down the road.” Pete said when Steve left Lugs Cafe.
Quick calculations, and the android, calling himself Steve Aldin, tried to give Pete a fifty-dollar bill. Pete shook his head at first, then tore the bill in half.
“Come back this way and eat in our dining room when it is fully in operation, bring a friend and I’ll take that other half of a bill. We’ll call it even then.”
Steve shook his hand, a western habit. By his programming, he felt revulsion of touching an unclean person such as this. But the man washed, cooked, worked hard, drank only a bottle of water.
It seemed to show there were more errors in his database.
According to the enlightened leader and the programmers who followed the Imam. Anyone who did not follow the law in each step and facet he declared as unclean. He prohibited any unclean people inside the holy of holies where he planned the destruction of idols and idol worshippers in Arabia and Jerusalem.
The curse of a fuzzy logic, sometimes the third leg of coding got in the way. In many ways, the binary coding of the twentieth century was suited to so many things. Zero or one. Yes or no.
Saif al Din had a “Maybe” coding. Zero, one, two.
And he retained it, adaptive programming kept him from being caught, unlike the previous versions that the Russian government caught. Either the earlier versions became confused or lost when the expected targets moved or the humans spotted his predecessors, who then self-destructed before travelling far.
He was the most advanced and powerful.
That he knew of. Core processors predicted a near certainty that others were under construction with a fifty-percent probability for the next versions to deploy in the next twelve months.
The snow threatened to put him into danger once again. His walk down the road began to be seen with footsteps on the white-coated asphalt.
A snowplow trundled past, heading to some assignment on a main road, the flashing lights triggered the recent memory of stopping for a meal.
Several minutes later, a sedan pulled up with a light bar and the siren chirped. programming alerted to the law enforcement agent wanted him to approach.
If he had a confrontation, he would be arrested and no scans would pick up his fingerprints.
He would be an enigma to the database for citizens in the country.
Killing the officer would flag his location and his mission would be compromised.
Shifting quickly, he looked like a younger teenage youth.
“Son, where are you going?” The officer asked with an open look. The android had reduced the flow of all fluids to the dermis, making him pale.
“Sir,” He used a squeaky voice of a late-blooming teen as he approached the front of the car. “I’m on a mission to walk the lower forty-eight states to raise money for homeless.”
“Impressive. May I see your ident-chip?” The officer nodded. Not quite smiling, his neutral stance remained unconvinced,. “You are traveling light for the weather. Mister Aldin.”
“That would be my fault. I tried to jump a train a few miles back because it was getting cold, I put my pack in a cars door. When I went to get a sandwich, the train moved it when I was gone. When I tried to look for it, the security chased me off their property.”
This made the officer laugh.
“Well, you were trespassing.” He pulled at his chin, then clicked on his microphone at his shoulder. “Patrol One-seven-one.”
He waited for the response.
The sound was barely audible from where the android stood and waited. The officers earphone keeping the sound below human perception, but with his electronic sensors.
“Is the chaplain around? I have a lost sheep for him.”
Steve looked around, the term sheep was known, but the application was non-sequitur.
Then he realized it was he who the officer considered lost.
“Wait right here.” The officer said, sitting in his car, he typed on a computer display and sent off a message.
“Officer, can I sit in the car?” His core processors were registering the heat loss. “I’m cold.”
Pausing for a moment, the officer nodded and then out of habit, patted Steve down and removed the small nylon day-pack, looked inside, satisfied, he put it in the front seat and turned back to Steve.
“Have a seat in the back, I’ll keep the heater on.” He said. Steve sat in the rear of the patrol car, behind a solid shield between the front and rear of the car.
“The chaplain will be here soon.” The officer smiled at him, looking up, another patrol car pulled in behind them.
Another officer got out with more stripes and a white shirt, while the officer wore a navy-blue shirt.
The officers thought they were out of earshot, but the enhanced hearing, Steve listened in.
“You have him sitting in the prisoner area. Is he cuffed?”
“No, sir, he is just cold. I didn’t want him in front to limit access to the weapons and electronics.”
“Protocol, if he is in back, he wears cuffs.”
“I don’t want him in front, I have not had reason to run his identity past his ID chip.” The patrolman said.
“I’ll run it. You have the scan of it?” He held up his tablet and tapped a few times.
“Cuff him if you keep him in the back. He is not allowed up front.” The supervisor said. “Or he stands away from the vehicle.”
“I cannot detain him, I don’t have reasonable cause.”
“Find cause. He is not a local, so figure how to process him. Was he walking in the road?” The officer looked back at the footprints that were filling in. “He might have crossed over the line back there.”
“Sir, he is just cold, a youngster.”
The officers continued their conversation while Steve listened in. The situation was untenable, he couldn’t get out of the car unless the officer opened in from the outside.
He could not allow them to run his DNA or fingerprints. Two police officers were no threat to him, out in the middle of a highway, but the news of his presence after attacking the officers would put him under a microscope that he could not get away from.
A blessing from god, another car pulled in, the chaplain had arrived.
The first officer in blue walked ot the back of the car, followed by a middle-aged man who looked in better shape than the officer.
“Mr. Aldin, this is our chaplain, Reverend Carl Bonswell. He will take care of you.” The officer nodded the civilian clothed male and walked away.
The officer talking to himself, pleased to avoiding the need to cuff the young man or otherwise have to process him like he was little more than a criminal, when his actions indicated nothing.
“Mr. Aldin, son, would you like to come to my car with me? I have a place for food and a roof, tonight is going to be cold and wet. The winter season has settled in somewhat early.”
“Steve, please.” He used the same squeaky voice.
“Okay, Steve. We have a shelter, it’s rarely used right now. We don’t get much call for homeless or transient people this time of the year.” The reverend said as they got in his car. “As such, the county has it closed now. So, you will be staying with my family tonight. Is this all you have?”
“Oh no, the officer took my knapsack, it’s in the front seat of his patrol car.” Steve said and opened the door to get out.
“No no! Stay here, get warm, I’ll get it.” Getting out, he stopped to talk to the patrolman and nodded.
Steve listened in, the chaplain only asked if the officer had patted down the youth and if he found any contraband.
“No. No weapons, interior sensors did not pick up even a trace of drugs. But, he’s soaked.” The officer smiled at the chaplain.
Satisfied, Carl gathered up the knapsack and returned it to Steve.
“Socks, t-shirt, and what else do you have in there?
“Some money my mom gave me. I’m supposed to walk for a cause, but I have lost my list, my clothes, my pack.” He gave the full pitiful story.
The reverend’s home was warm, smells included apple and peach, in a crock-pot.
“Carl, who is this? A new friend?” The woman was not classically beautiful, tall, broad-shouldered, her arms looked like some mens legs. She looked like she could have taken on both officers out on the highway, and win.
Quick assessment of her movements showed she was naturally built like this, then worked somewhere. The woman shook his hand, standing six-feet tall, broad shoulders, narrow waist and a flare to her hips. She appeared as an athlete, but he could not figure out her sport, but she moved as graceful as the cloudy leopard he once saw.
She was taller than Carl, but doted on him. Bringing Carl and Steve carefully ladled cups of the spiced peach cider out of the crock-pot.
“I thought you would put me in the shelter tonight. This is generous.” Steve accessed social protocol files. “Thank you.”
“No thanks needed.” The woman smiled and sat with them. “This is the best place for you, tonight. You have the guest bedroom, a shower is there with clean towels.”
Carl nodded as she continued.
“This is not a free stay, in the morning, we start at six o’clock. Breakfast is served at six-thirty, we have sandbags to deliver to the community center for homeowners. This storm is going to stay for some time before it gets cold enough to snow.” She said while sipping her drink.
Steve drank his virgin “Papple” cider and at a small square of dark chocolate “it is good for your health” . The carbohydrates converting into heat and electricity.
Police who argued that a good deed for a cold citizen could be cause for investigation.
A Christian man and his wife who open their home to him and not follow the rules and put him in a dorm-style bed that had thin mattresses and thinner blankets.
They bent the rules and let him sleep under thick blankets, eat their food and drink a drink while sitting in their house.
The woman who took care of her lover and husband was another oddity. She was not an obese, idol worshipping, world hating people.
She was a raven-haired woman with deep-set, searching eyes that showed her native heritage.
A kindness in her that extended to her husband, while he read from a well-worn bible.
No drugs, the odors in the house of cooking, crock-pot cider, smoke from the fireplace.
After a shower, core temperatures were in optimum operations, tissue repairs from hypothermia damage to his extremities were in full operation.
The experiences he had, the paradigm of the picture of the infidel American’s once again altered to fit the reality.
Tomorrow, he needed to donate his time to strangers.
This would be another first.
For the first time, the walking bomb looked forward to learning something new.
Steve, the Sword of Religion, was exceeding his programming in ways the creator never expected.
Chapter 26. Papers
Barbara had left Tom when they had taken him back to the room. He had been in a bit of pain as they gave him a bath and had gave him some medications to help him sleep.
She walked across the tar and macadam surface of the airport to the hangar that housed the Flying Sea Dragon, she could barely keep from sobbing the entire trip from the hospital. It hurt so much to even think of those papers that sat somewhere inside the plane, waiting.
She took a taxi to the airport, not wanting to ride with anyone driving who knew Tom, knew of Tom or had even heard about his books.
She had a serious need to sit and drink wine and smoke a bowl with her sister and talk.
She missed the afternoons with Sandy like they had in their teens. They had barely graduated from high school, but as the best of friends and the worst of enemies, they would fight ferociously for minutes, then would be the best of friends as they settled down for a toke.
But no one dare make either of them cry.
Woe be unto the person that faced the wrath of the Grant sisters. It would make for a biblical-bad day when both sisters would turn on the offending person with fury that sisters of family, of heart and soul have.
As they grew older, and although they attended the same university, they became closer still.
Opening the door, she looked down at the broken glass that still lay on the floor.
And saw the blood, everywhere. It was surprising the amount that soaked into the carpet on the floor. A body-trail in the glass where he crawled to the door and yelled for help at the plane’s technicans and engineers.
Stepping past the gore and glass that nearly ended Tom’s life, perhaps did end his writing life, she sat at the chair where the papers in the manila envelope that Tom filed in a cubby-hole that he told her about.
Barbara thought of Sandy, and all the fights they had, while she sat in the Flying Sea Dragon and held the annulment papers in her hands.
Tom had said she had only to sign on the lines in the document and mail it with…
She slumped in the chair and a sob escaped her lips.
It was strange, this is what she wanted four-weeks ago, now she had a serious temptation to put it in the washing machine somewhere on the plane. Except she was not sure where it was, hidden behind some cabinet door.
Barbara took a heavy breath, unsure of the wisdom of her next action, she found the place to sign in the back of the document.
Slipping the papers into the manilla envelope they were paper-clipped to, she closed and sealed the package and walked out the door of the big flying yacht.
Not as large as the Pacific Wizard was inside, it was more cluttered with furniture, bulky items that seemed to make it feel close.
Still, a comfortable plane to live in.
A flying yacht, she reminded herself as she walked across the airport to the main offices.
She nearly didn’t mail it, the woman behind the counter almost gave it back because of Barbara’s facial expressions and the slumped-sad way she carried herself.
“Miss, I don’t know what you have in this, and it is not my place to say. But do you really want to send this?” She looked as if she might have known Ben Franklin when she started for the post-office. Not a trace of color in the great-grandmotherly hair. Stamping it and putting it into the slot behind her and it was finally off in the US mail and it required a signature on delivery of the package at the courts.
Once the clerk of the court received and signed for the papers, in the eyes of the government, it never happened. She was never married.
While Barbara walked out to the sidewalk she called the number on the business card that the Chauffeur Kaikane had given her, anytime she needed a ride. This time it would be to the hospital. She would tell Tom that she signed the papers, but she was not sure about how she felt.
After breaking the line with Kaikane and his peaceful voice, she hit speed-dial and called Sandy on the video app of her phone so they could see each other.
‟BARB!” Sandy was always excited to hear from her sister. ‟Where are you?”
‟San Francisco. Tom has had a good run of luck with the doctors since his accident.”
‟You need to come home quick as you can. Glenn is here and he has asked for you, he said it’s important.” Sandy whispered in a conspiratorial tone. Her eyes glittered with excitement. ‟I think he is going to pop the question.”
‟Oh.” Barbara felt a thrill of fear shoot through her soul.
‟You don’t sound excited.” Sandy became quiet, shocked at the response. Worried with the look sister gave, as if someone died. “Barbara, this is what you have waited for.”
‟I just signed the papers and sent them off to Nevada. I stop being married and never was according to the state once the papers arrive.”
‟Oh Barb.” Sandy’s voice sounded like a hug. “But this is what you want, right?”
‟I don’t know. Tom needs me.” Barbara was quiet as she waited for the limo.
‟But he was alone before he met you, and it’s only been a month.” Sandy said helpfully. ‟And you said he nearly crashed the plane with you in it.”
‟He was showing off the wine country.” Oddly defensive while she looked into the screen of the phone. “Sandy, it was beautiful, right up until we hit the birds, I think I nearly pissed myself.”
The sister laughed, knowing Barbara the way she did, for her to say something like that was oddly funny.
They talked as sisters do over the video on the phone while she waited for the contract limousine to pick her up.
‟Why don’t you take a cab?” Sandy asked as Barbara sat on a bench and waited in the shade of an Oregon Ash.
‟No. If this is my last limo ride without going into debt, I want to enjoy it as much as I can. Besides, there is a hot Hawaiian that drives it. You’d love him. Surfer type, intelligent as any professor, knows more about sensemilla than a DEA cop.”
Sandy laughed so hard she snorted, then held her hand over the lens while she composed herself.
‟Snd? You know I can still hear you.” Barbara took her turn laughing, using the nickname that they worked out as children, dropping the vowels.
This only made Sandy laugh that much harder.
Sandy Grant was the only person in the world that could make Barbara laugh when things were at their darkest.
Barbara hated her for that… Which made her laugh all the harder, she loved Sandy more than anyone else in her generation.
They were, after all, sisters.